zondag 8 januari 2012

Sumarry

Bridget Jones has a boyfriend named Mark Darcy. Bridget really wants to marry Mark. Mark is cheating with Rebecca. Rebecca called Mark and Bridget heard it on the speaker and run away. On the work they asked Bridget to go on holiday with Daniel, a colleague of Bridget to Thailand. For a program about the Thai Cultur. Bridget was getting Ill in Thailand and did some strange things. She even kissed with Daniel! But Daniel is also cheating. Bridget wants as quickly as impossible. When she packed her cases with her friend she get an snake statue in her case of her friend. So Bridget get arrested and must go jail, but not really long. When she come at home, her friends surprised her. The next day Bridget goes to Mark but Rebecca opened the door. Rebecca told Bridget that she isn’t in love with Mark, but that she is in love is with Bridget and kissed Bridget. Bridget is really happy and goes to Mark’s work. There she told the hole story and eventually the married. 

 

2 opmerkingen:

  1. - So, this was the hole movie.= whole / This is the summary of the entire movie. (choice of words /spelling)
    - I hope you enjoyed reading. = ....reading it (choice of words)
    - Mark is cheating with Rebecca. = Bridget thinks Mark is cheating on Bridget.... (choice of words / storyline)
    - Rebecca called Mark and Bridget heard it on the speaker and run away. = What did she hear and why did she ran away? (storyline & grammar)
    - On the work .... = At work..... (choice of w)
    - For a program about the Thai Cultur. (weird sentence)
    - Bridget was getting Ill = fell ill /became ill (choice of w)
    - But Daniel is also cheating. = Cheating on who? (storyline) Why change tenses? (grammar)
    - Bridget wants as quickly as impossible. = weird sentence.
    - she get an snake statue in her case of her friend. = she gets / got .. a snake statue (grammar) What is the story on this statuette? (storyline)
    - So Bridget get arrested = gets ... (grammar)
    - and must go jail... = go to jail (choice of w)
    - When she come at home.. = she comes/gets home (choice of w/grammar)
    - Why does she go to Mark? (storyline)
    - Rebecca told Bridget that she isn’t in love with Mark, but that she is in love is with Bridget and kissed Bridget.= sentence is too long.
    - the married. = they (spelling)

    - Your summary is too vague.
    - You keep changing tenses.
    - Your choice of words isn't always correct.

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  2. Choice of words = 3 points
    Grammar = 3 points
    Storyline = 2 points

    Mark = 4 (8 points divided by 2)

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